Saturday, October 9, 2010

Michael Perelman's Analytical Biography Updated

Many of you told me that I should reedit this. See if you like this better.
http://michaelperelman.wordpress.com/an-ideological-biography/

2 comments:

Jazzbumpa said...

I didn't see the earlier version, but this one has sentences in it that are very badly constructed, and basically make no sense.

I have a hard time proofing what I write, so I have some sympathy. Have somebody else mark it up - you probably won't find the clunkers yourself.

Frex: pre-comma here.

He knew that he was doing not following the right path, even though they never spoke or even acknowledged each other on the street.

Cheers!
JzB

Debra said...

I stuck my new comment in the previous post.