I didn't see the earlier version, but this one has sentences in it that are very badly constructed, and basically make no sense. I have a hard time proofing what I write, so I have some sympathy. Have somebody else mark it up - you probably won't find the clunkers yourself.Frex: pre-comma here. He knew that he was doing not following the right path, even though they never spoke or even acknowledged each other on the street.Cheers!JzB
I stuck my new comment in the previous post.
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